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    dots Submission Name: All I Wantdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 19/67/85
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 417
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    dotsAll I Wantdots
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    All I want is someone to spend time with
    Just to be there for me
    When I need a hug
    When I need a shoulder to cry on
    When I need to laugh
    When I need to talk
    When I need to be quiet
    When I am sad
    When I am mad
    When I am happy
    When I am full of rage
    When I am crying
    When I am sleeping
    Just someone to spend time with
    To share memories with
    Someone I can love
    And who will love me back even more
    All I want is someone to spend time with




    Submitted on 2013-12-14 01:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to much use of the word I , and am

    you could use more depth and emotion, this seems plain and not well thought out or heart felt , i could sense where u were going with it so dont give up

    try try again !

    3/5 rating from me :)


    PS comment back !
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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