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    dots Submission Name: I Need Helpdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Need Helpdots
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    Lying on the bathroom floor
    I ask myself why I do this
    Day after day
    How can I live with all this rage
    All of this anger
    And all of this hatred
    Towards people
    How can I live with others
    When I can't even live with myself
    Why do I scream night after night
    "What is wrong with me?"
    Where can I go
    What can I do
    I need help
    I can't save me from myself
    I need someone
    Anyone just anyone...




    Submitted on 2013-12-14 01:57:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel you could have delt alot deeper into this one ,
    lack of emotions for me

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    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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