All of Myself to Kill

Author: Crestfallenman ASL Info:    24/M/CA Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622 /962 /454 Words: 98

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All of Myself to Kill

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Research, formulate, recreate, devastate, How long does this all truly take. Physically drained, emotionally pained, Deranged, contorted to a sense of ultimate... Decay... I'm dying and no one even knows it, To go home to cut myself deeper, Minds fucked by lullaby pills and refer, In a silence doth rot, For this fucking curse this world brought! To the mortal sins we create, Be my darkest that I take my bow... Loathing to full destruction, hath my spite Arrest my spirit with death birthing night... Lone, With all of myself to kill.

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self infliction , that takes me back , remember the scars remain and the pain adventualy heals, this has a lot of feeling behind it 5/5

| Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]

Makes me think of death metal. Well done in that sense. The self-harm reference seemed a bit too literal.... Cliche maybe. Just my opinion. Nonetheless, I like it. -Nikki

| Posted on 2013-12-16 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]

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