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    dots Submission Name: All of Myself to Killdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsAll of Myself to Killdots
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    Research, formulate, recreate, devastate,
    How long does this all truly take.

    Physically drained, emotionally pained,
    Deranged, contorted to a sense of ultimate...

    Decay...

    I'm dying and no one even knows it,
    To go home to cut myself deeper,
    Minds fucked by lullaby pills and refer,
    In a silence doth rot,
    For this fucking curse this world brought!

    To the mortal sins we create,
    Be my darkest that I take my bow...
    Loathing to full destruction, hath my spite
    Arrest my spirit with death birthing night...

    Lone,

    With all of myself to kill.




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      self infliction , that takes me back , remember the scars remain and the pain adventualy heals, this has a lot of feeling behind it
    5/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me think of death metal. Well done in that sense. The self-harm reference seemed a bit too literal.... Cliche maybe. Just my opinion.
    Nonetheless, I like it.

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2013-12-16 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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