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    dots Submission Name: What Do You Saydots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 5/118/134
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 512
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    dotsWhat Do You Saydots
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    What do you say?
    Will you come with me on my journey,
    Or will you leave me forever?
    What do you say?
    Will you help pick me up when i fall,
    Or will you kick me while i'm down?
    What do you say?
    Will you trust me with your secrets,
    Or will you hide behind your insecurities?
    What do you say?
    Do want me to wait for you to be ready,
    Or would you rather i moved on alone?
    What do you say?
    Do you think I am strong enough,
    Or do you think that i will fail instantly?
    What do you say?
    Are you with me...
    Or against me?




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    ||| Comments |||
      Again with the reapeating i feel you have talent
    i feel that there is meaning behind your words
    but repeating bores the reader , you want the reader to feel
    to be intuned with how your feeling,

    to each is to there own , just my
    Chrits

    3/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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