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    dots Submission Name: The Childdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Childdots
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    I prayed over and over
    To just be sober
    I didn’t want to die, just bleed
    I have yet to plant my sober seed
    Wanting to feel alive again
    The razor had become my only friend
    Thinking about things from the past
    So much pain, the present would not last
    For me to see another day
    Praying the pain to just go away
    Not wanting a single being near
    My heart had never felt cheer
    I wanted to just fade, be gone
    I thought that was it, that I was done
    With life you see, I could not bare
    To see that child standing there
    All she wanted was to be set free
    The child I hold inside of me




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      oh , wow , i can relate to this one all to well...
    i like the word play , its sad but remembrance
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    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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