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    dots Submission Name: What My Heart Fiendsdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 19/67/85
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhat My Heart Fiendsdots
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    Lonely tears
    Fall one by one
    This sad life of mine
    Has just begun
    Reaching out
    For someone’s love
    But there's no one below
    And no one above
    Just me in the middle
    Of this lonely world
    With only more sadness
    To be unfurled
    Salty tears
    Are all I sweat
    A brutal bash
    Is all I get
    Looking for someone
    To fix my heart
    Because it's been
    Ripped apart
    No love in my heart
    No love in my head
    A whimper and a sigh
    Is all that's been said
    I'm falling far
    Away from light
    All I can do
    Is succumb to the night
    I'm waiting for someone
    Anyone you see
    To open my heart
    With the key
    The key is love
    That's all I need
    That is what
    My heart does fiend




    Submitted on 2013-12-14 23:55:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one , very heart felt , wordy and emotinal
    5/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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