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    dots Submission Name: Can You Save Me Nowdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 315
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCan You Save Me Nowdots
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    I watch my cold black sky fly over me
    I close my eyes your face is all I see
    The wind blows softly as I fall asleep
    In my dreams the monsters, they creep
    The shadows of my world are haunting me
    Will I ever be set free
    I feel so rejected
    my mind is infected
    From my dreams and what is real
    My demon, my heart you did steal
    I cant believe in myself anymore
    My heart stops as I fall to the floor

    Can you save me now
    Am I in too deep
    The stars are falling down
    While I forever dream

    Another day starts to go by
    The tears come slowly as I start to cry
    Thinking thoughts not wanting to
    My demon, what can I do
    Trying to stay strong for us
    And staying true to you I must
    Can you help me find my way
    Each and every day
    What is my life all about
    Will I ever make it out
    I’m lost I'm broken
    I’m lost I'm broken

    Can you save me now
    Am I in too deep
    The stars are falling down
    While I forever dream
    Can you save me now
    Am I still asleep
    My sky is falling down
    While I forever dream

    For all the hate that’s been unfurled
    I’m falling into my own world
    I need you right now
    I shall reach you but how
    I just want to run away
    From these terror filled days
    I can't even find one reason
    Why I should live without you demon
    I am lost no longer found
    In my tears I will soon drown

    Can you save me now
    Am I in too deep
    The stars are falling down
    While I forever dream
    Can you save me now
    Am I still asleep
    My sky is falling down
    While I forever dream




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    1. i really like this and i can relate
    2. i dont have anything i can say i dont like about this one
    3. i can relate and connect to this
    4. havent we all been burned by love , yet we write such fleeting feelings
    5. the whole thing in genral kept me intrigued
    6. feels more like a song then a poem or writing
    7. nope pretty clear on the heartbreak :(
    8. own personal heart acke
    9. i dont want you to change it ,
    10. havent .
    11. very heartfelt
    12. yes

    rate from me 5/5

    *** comment back
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved this... and I can relate all too well. Trust me. It can and will get better- if anyone understands despair and helplessness I am all too familiar. Take care if you ever need to talk let me know :)
    | Posted on 2013-12-16 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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