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    dots Submission Name: The Deceiversdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Deceiversdots
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    The time has come to hide in my cave
    As the wicked witch is revealed
    For the beast has lied to her once again
    And the demon child fights with them both
    Life is grand, indeed
    And I cast my happiness aside for theirs
    But never am I good enough
    One day may this hell hole be reigned by peace
    But if things are not to change
    The deceivers are at fault forevermore




    Submitted on 2013-12-15 00:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good job.
    Only a true open-minded and understanding poet could find the meaning that the world needs to change :)
    | Posted on 2013-12-21 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      N/A i cant really comment on this one , feels like expression but nothing is behind it , seems to fall flat
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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