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    dots Submission Name: Pouring Out The Feelingsdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPouring Out The Feelingsdots
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    To uncover and smother my feelings and heartache
    Is to bind all my hate and that’s a mistake
    Wishing in my mind to leave the anger behind
    I try to cover my thoughts so my thinking is blind
    I am not deceiving but instead determined
    To have an awesome future for this I am certain
    For a lot of my life I have been hated
    And most of that time I was horribly degraded
    Thinking to myself about why these things happened
    It was their doing for this I was saddened
    Not for me but for what they had done
    And because I was silent I had been shunned
    To the darkness of my past I gained hatred in myself
    And when I felt sanity slip I didn’t want anybody’s help
    The things that happened inside my brain
    Were not happy things so I thought I was insane
    The anger inside me was pushing through my veins
    And like an explosion I blew up and broke my chains
    I felt so psychotic I wanted no more pills
    When I knew they didn’t help I wasn’t too thrilled
    They were just hiding my problems not letting them free
    So I was unhappy all the time and very angry
    On the outside it might look like I’m smiling
    But on the inside I’m screaming and crying
    Not just for my pain but for others too
    No one should have to go through the stuff I’ve been through




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      4/5 on creative writing ,
    good emotions and semi good word flow but could have been better
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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