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    dots Submission Name: Angry Girl Angry Childdots

    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/65/84
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAngry Girl Angry Childdots

    People have hurt her inside and out
    In her mind there is so much doubt
    That she will ever be alright for a day
    Just for that day will the pain go away
    She's so angry and hurt inside
    She has no hope, she has no pride
    So much hate and anger in her mind
    Happiness she feels she will never find
    Inside is she just an angry child
    And outside an angry girl gone wild
    If you can hear the silent cries
    Maybe you'll see the pain in her eyes
    If you see past the darkened pain
    You can help her to feel less insane
    Even though she'll push you away
    It just means she needs you to stay
    She's lost, broken and very hurt
    Her anger comes in huge bursts
    She may seem too much to take on
    Sometimes it seems the anger is gone
    But the next thing you see is a flood
    Of her tears as well as her blood
    She cuts to get rid of crazy thoughts
    But it doesn't help so her mind rots
    Sometimes she pretends to be okay
    But the truth is she is never that way
    There's just too much pain and anger
    To herself she is a huge danger
    Pain and hate run through her veins
    And hurt leaves scars and stains
    On her skin and in through her pores
    Rushing through her heart's core
    The anger flows like rapid waters
    To settle down she doesn't bother
    Nothing helps to ease the pain
    So over her, hate and anger reign
    She tries to crawl out and seek help
    But she stays within her guarded shell
    Just an angry girl, just an angry child
    With a heart torn, corrupted and defiled

    Submitted on 2013-12-15 00:11:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has the texture of frustrated chaos - rage, numbness, an inability to find, feel, and enjoy life's quiet moments, a mind in overdrive following a muddled map that doesn't quite lead anywhere.

    These are just my thoughts as you wrestle with your thoughts.

    | Posted on 2013-12-23 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
    1. Be honest.,( this feels like something i would write )
    2. Try not to give only compliments. ( it makes me kinda depressed)
    3. How did it make you feel? ( # 2 )
    4. Why did it make you feel that way? ( i can relate )
    5. Which parts? ( the whole post)
    6. What distracted from the piece? ( the legth and depth)(lol but good depth)
    7. What was unclear? (no , very clear)
    8. What does it remind you of? ( a younger less evil me)
    9. How could it be improved? ( chop it up and keep the juicy parts)
    10. What would you have done differently? #9
    11. What was your interpretation of it? (venting ? , relief , expression )
    12. Does it feel original? ( yes , very much so )
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


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