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    dots Submission Name: Cycledots
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    Author: Magickirene
    Elite Ratio:    1.36 - 2/2/4
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsCycledots
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    As a child she was taught with anger

    As a teenager she flirted with danger

    She learned that hate was love

    Weapons, fist and feet, these were the tools of lovers

    One day it was her turn to be the mother

    Did she have the strength?

    Does she have the power?

    To turn the page and begin anew at this hour?

    As she held the tiny life that had grown inside her

    A vow was made

    This child would learn love not hate

    To suffer would never be this child's fate

    As a new cycle has begun, now this story is done





    Submitted on 2013-12-15 15:58:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      1. i like this
    2. i think u could do more with this
    3. i like the meaning behind it
    4. it made me relate
    5. the parts when you talked about your unborn child and showing love and not passing on the hate of your past
    6. i feel that this doesnt have enough word flow
    7. the meaning was clear
    8. this reminds me of my past endovors and hurt
    9. more word play , more depth and feeling :) dont be shy to show emotions
    10. i dont think i would change the way you wrote this ,i like the format , and the fact you were straight forward with it .
    11. my interpretation of it?.. i sence the feeling behind it , i can relate
    12. yes, it feels like your own work and not copied
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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