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    dots Submission Name: Hungerdots
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    Author: Blizzard
    Elite Ratio:    0.83 - 1/2/5
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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    dotsHungerdots
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    I need it,
    I want it.
    But if I have it
    will the person i am now slip away?
    Slip into darkness but pleasure.
    I hunger for it, I need it.
    The smells to much,
    I need to taste it.
    Feel the warmth through my body.
    See their pain as i drink.
    But i can not help it,
    I'm hungry....




    Submitted on 2013-12-15 18:15:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this makes a vamp wanna bite :) but i wish you could of went more in-depth with this
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good
    | Posted on 2013-12-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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