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    dots Submission Name: My castle™© dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsMy castle™© dots
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    My castle™©

    i gave you the world
    my castle came tumbling down
    my draw bridge in a blaze

    i haven't enough tears to
    put out these flames
    they keep rising ,
    just like my broken heart
    my castle you
    left to crumble ,
    lies n secrete's in a chest
    found out by lover's
    guess

    i wanted to trust you ,
    i wanted to love you

    was it vain?
    I dont think,
    I can ever love you again?


    So we closed the past
    you burnt the bridge to the ground
    I cried Then rain fell down
    the flames increased
    my walls left defenseless,fell
    our memories locked away
    thats where they will stay

    ™©




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