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I miss you™©


Author: kyserin
ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 44 /25 /55
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /You left me
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Description:


lost love,emotions


I miss you™©



I miss you™©

i hate the fact that i miss you ,
i hate the fact that when i think about you
i SMILE ,

i hate how i can't bring myself
to delete you from my life

like the pictures on my wall
but NO their still there

just like in my mind your still there
you still have a place in my heart

a little bit still lingering there ,

for the moment i'll pretend that the
last smile was real

that things will be better then they we're
but for right now i miss you

™©




Submitted on 2013-12-17 16:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i wish they had a like buttons on comments lol but i could still use some more , lol this was rewritten to what is now , so revamped i guess u can say but its older , i hate that the people we fall for make us feel this way.
| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
  this piece is very touching; i believe at some point in life, we all find that one person we think makes us truly happy, and then their true colors are revealed. i have seen some of the greatest works of art come out of the hurt from these circumstances; betrayal, missing someone, etc. your piece begs the reader to think of that person in their life, and think back and wonder if they could have done things differently and how will they be different in the future. keep up writing :)
| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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