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Lucid Eden™©


Author: kyserin
ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 44 /25 /55
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /I am dead inside
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Inspired by my friend Zero, his lost unspoken feelings


Lucid Eden™©



Lucid Eden™©

it okay you tore apart my heart
but i felt nothing just something

wet and bitter running
down the side of my face ,

ill pretend im strong and that ,

im much better off , but my insides are
weeping these tears are falling down my
face ,

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Submitted on 2013-12-17 16:10:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  @RWS thank you for your input
very Appreciated

this work was old and i havent re-written it
but it can def use more depth an perception

i agree ,
please read my other work and tell me what u think :)
| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
  Lucid Eden

you tore my heart apart
but i felt nothing

just something wet
and bitter running

down the side of my face
i'll pretend im strong

and that i'm much better off
but my insides are weeping

these tears are falling
down my face


This is a very still, very hushed, very quiet glimpse into the heart of someone who'd rather shield herself from dealing with raw pain. I made a few suggestions concerning the format of your submission, but I believe that the simple, direct language is very much in keeping with the subject matter.
| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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