Lucid Eden™©

Author: kyserin ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 44 /25 /55 Words: 62

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Lucid Eden™©

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Lucid Eden™© it okay you tore apart my heart but i felt nothing just something wet and bitter running down the side of my face , ill pretend im strong and that , im much better off , but my insides are weeping these tears are falling down my face , ™©

Submitted on 2013-12-17 16:10:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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@RWS thank you for your input very Appreciated this work was old and i havent re-written it but it can def use more depth an perception i agree , please read my other work and tell me what u think :)

| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]

Lucid Eden you tore my heart apart but i felt nothing just something wet and bitter running down the side of my face i'll pretend im strong and that i'm much better off but my insides are weeping these tears are falling down my face This is a very still, very hushed, very quiet glimpse into the heart of someone who'd rather shield herself from dealing with raw pain. I made a few suggestions concerning the format of your submission, but I believe that the simple, direct language is very much in keeping with the subject matter.

| Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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