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    dots Submission Name: rambling emotions with deep devotions™©dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 81
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    dotsrambling emotions with deep devotions™©dots
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    So many words floating in my head
    so many things i might have said

    i can't change who i am
    i cant make you see what your
    eye's dont see ,

    so many reasons to let you go
    and so many reasons to beg
    you to stay ,

    if there was a way i'd save you
    id chose this pain and save you

    so i say with a heavy heart
    that we'd never be apart

    ™©




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      So many words floating in my head
    so many things i might have said

    so many reasons to let you go
    and so many reasons to beg you to stay

    if there was a way to save you
    i'd embrace this pain and i'd save you

    but i can't change who i am
    you refuse to see what you can't believe

    so i say with a heavy heart
    if i had the power, we'd never be apart


    Just a slight remodel of your post.
    | Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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