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    dots Submission Name: Forbidden desire™©dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsForbidden desire™©dots
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    my muse gone away
    my art lay astray

    my heart on the floor
    in shattered pieces

    torn like a collage thesis
    just broke into pieces

    fray away and never
    left to stay

    damage by fire
    burned by and honest desire

    shame for my shame
    and the one
    left to blame

    heart of hearts
    torn asunder
    tears of blood
    is what i desire

    ™©




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