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the one who hurt me

Author: gwenn sundala
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thoughts that come to me on occasion when i think of my former fiancée and how he left me. finally decided to try writing some things out. not my best work, but hurrah for effort? lol

the one who hurt me

i sit here and think of the memories of you.
am i making them up? or are they true?
the thoughts i am thinking are making me blue,
but i cannot keep from thinking of you.

you hurt me deeply when you left that day.
i never thought you would walk away.
i thought that forever and ever you'd stay.
but then you left me that horrible day.

for three weeks, your silence drove me mad.
i wondered if i had done something bad.
i prayed you come back to me, then i'd be glad.
those three weeks of silence driving me mad.

several years later, i still think of you.
although long over, it still makes me blue
to think of the lies now that i see what's true;
you left me, for sex i would not give to you.

i'm glad that i didn't do what you had asked.
for someone more worthy than you took that task.
on hearing of you, they drank from my flask,
and they were the one i said yes to when asked.

happy am i, but still sad you are gone.
you left me, i know, it is over and done.
i no longer need your old bags of bones.
but still i weep, for your friendship is gone...

Submitted on 2013-12-17 16:36:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  your rate from me is 5/5 i really like this one
there is depth and meaning and you dont repeat yourself !

you go into depth and description and i love it

reading the first 2 incerepts make me what to read the rest of it

keep it up !

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