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    dots Submission Name: the one who hurt medots

    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       thoughts that come to me on occasion when i think of my former fiancée and how he left me. finally decided to try writing some things out. not my best work, but hurrah for effort? lol

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    dotsthe one who hurt medots

    i sit here and think of the memories of you.
    am i making them up? or are they true?
    the thoughts i am thinking are making me blue,
    but i cannot keep from thinking of you.

    you hurt me deeply when you left that day.
    i never thought you would walk away.
    i thought that forever and ever you'd stay.
    but then you left me that horrible day.

    for three weeks, your silence drove me mad.
    i wondered if i had done something bad.
    i prayed you come back to me, then i'd be glad.
    those three weeks of silence driving me mad.

    several years later, i still think of you.
    although long over, it still makes me blue
    to think of the lies now that i see what's true;
    you left me, for sex i would not give to you.

    i'm glad that i didn't do what you had asked.
    for someone more worthy than you took that task.
    on hearing of you, they drank from my flask,
    and they were the one i said yes to when asked.

    happy am i, but still sad you are gone.
    you left me, i know, it is over and done.
    i no longer need your old bags of bones.
    but still i weep, for your friendship is gone...

    Submitted on 2013-12-17 16:36:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your rate from me is 5/5 i really like this one
    there is depth and meaning and you dont repeat yourself !

    you go into depth and description and i love it

    reading the first 2 incerepts make me what to read the rest of it

    keep it up !

    comment back thanks

    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]

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