this piece is very heavy; the constant all-caps of the subject YOU is very clear that whomever they are, it does not bode well for them. your vengeance drips from your pen like blood on a sword. as a nerd, i immediately think of a sith lord enacting his own revenge on those who cross him. it stirs in the soul a darkness that most try to hide from, but are forced to face some time or other. well done.
1. this is morbid
2.i like it
3. makes me semi evil
4. because i can inmagine doing this to someone who has caused me pain
5. Which parts? the begging is what had me going
6. What distracted from the piece? the rants and not so much straight forward
7. What was unclear? half n half ???
8. What does it remind you of? my demonic self lol
9. How could it be improved? more word flow please !
10. What would you have done differently? more expression :)
11. What was your interpretation of it? this person has been hurt ,
12. Does it feel original? indeed ,