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    dots Submission Name: Curiosity kills no catdots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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       But it martyrs by betrayal, our private thoughts and feelings.


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    dotsCuriosity kills no catdots
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    Of late
    I've stared past
    fork-strewn dinner plates;

    tines pinging like tuning forks,
    precise and crystalline:

    from scratches on writing pads,
    to clacking on fading keyboard tiles,
    to taps on smudged touch screens --

    thoughts and feelings exiled, martyred
    for existence beyond skull and ribs.

    Of late
    my chin bobs
    to strains of melodies;

    countering the blare of the radio's beats.
    No one sees this march to my own drums.





    Submitted on 2013-12-18 02:34:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with kyserin in that the subject is confusing.....at first. as you read, a picture begins to come together until the last line; "No one sees this march to my own drums." the picture of a person wandering through a mindless, daily existence, making sense of it the only way they know how, becomes clear and is very thought provoking. i like it. well done.
    | Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know exactly what kinda of comment to leave for this ,
    i dont hate it , but i dont exactly like it , but im not displeased with it ither , its one of those where your meaning wasnt clear

    3/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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