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    dots Submission Name: Oh my Angel(Cc)(TM)dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 558
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    Bytes: 738



    Description:
       *I see you* But do you see me ?


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    dotsOh my Angel(Cc)(TM)dots
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    Oh My Angel

    still your wounds are real
    though wounds can heal though scars remain ,
    only you love can chose to end that pain

    see you have your angel,
    if you'd only see what you are not seeing ,

    your not alone your not empty
    i can see you, but can you see me ?

    Am i blinded by emotion
    Am i loving you to strong?
    All i want to do is just hold on.

    Oh i can't push you away
    I only want you to stay

    I can't ever see myself
    not ever feeling this way

    i've never known words
    ever so true , but

    Oh my Angel I see you

    (Cc)(TM)




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      thank you soooooo much ! yes alot of feelings went into this , mostly all my poems are pure emotions !
    im so glad for this one to get a comment ,
    thank you again !
    | Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      once again, your emotions have brought about a nice piece of work. my only advice would be to notice some standard grammar errors, but maybe that is part of your prose when you write (as mine is to use mostly lower case), who am i to judge? and either way your style develops and grows the more you write, which i strongly encourage you to do. keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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