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    dots Submission Name: Wind Blowsdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/132
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWind Blowsdots
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    Swords clash.
    Sparks fly.
    Then a fire starts nearby.
    You run.
    I stay.
    This problem won't go away.
    They approach.
    I stand.
    Then i hear my death band.
    Marching forward.
    I listen.
    The sunlight makes our swords glisten.
    I swing.
    It falls.
    Now there is blood on these walls.
    He falls.
    I rise.
    Still there are tears in my eyes.
    Unwanted death.
    Forced fight.
    Now i take a bite.
    From life.
    Kill me.
    For now i can see.
    I'm wrong.
    I'm dead.
    And now i lay in this bed.
    For you.
    For him.
    I'm just as pathetic as them.
    Take life.
    Take me.
    For i have forsaken she.
    Happiness gone.
    Dark grows.
    And the wind still blows..




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      Such long drawn out pain.
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