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    dots Submission Name: The Possible Dreamdots
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    Author: CrypticBard
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    dotsThe Possible Dreamdots
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    I remember looking up,
    holding your big hand;
    the moon large and bright

    just like it is tonight --

    we walked hand in hand
    as we talked of dreams
    and visiting far away lands.


    I remember looking down
    at my shoes, hands on my lap
    as I was told to apply myself --

    just hunker down;

    I alone had to make my path
    no talk of dreams or wishes
    until the work before me was done.


    I've had a certain longing;
    of pinings in misty recollection,
    while tomorrow held no more wonder.

    If things beyond reach are like that moon;
    then teach me to dream the possible dream.








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      Darn, another Epicurean day dream. Of resistance is fierce to you on the intensities. I know, it's true it's not practical to be this armed autonomy but the prosaic it wasn't even aimed enigma entity, I still dream of the raucously riotous this pandemic phatic fatidic's to futurity cudgel. Of everybody should own one of tool in hand gone. If every bodies worked no one would need to brandish. Oh well, another impossible dream. I guess we need to make a living. No time for such frivolity frolic………. Aw come on you know you enjoy your moonshine.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-12-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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