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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Aghh the burden
    The bitterness that comes
    knowing
    How do you keep it
    from yourself
    How do you stand quietly
    next to fate
    Hold its wrinkled hand
    Why give it to suck a doer
    Ought to be reserved
    for the watchers
    It’s no wonder this blood drowns us
    Like a tight robe
    Yes balancing
    That’s how it should be done
    So as to not to scribble
    Careful not to make the sun green
    and the grass orange
    no one ever said you had to watch
    silently
    so I scream from behind the veil
    watching
    letting you go
    Slowly.




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