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    dots Submission Name: Daddydots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 811



    Description:
       To my wonderful amazing caring funny loving dorky daddy!
    Merry Christmas Daddy I Love You.


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    dotsDaddydots
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    The man I first loved
    The man I love now
    The man I'll love forever
    The man I don't wanna let down
    My daddy
    You watched out for me
    When my eyes were closed
    You cared for me
    When I felt alone
    You loved me
    When I hated you
    All because your my daddy
    I see now
    What you tried to do
    Lead and guide me
    Make me new
    Make me better than I ever was
    Make me better than I am today
    Make me better in every way
    And now I just pray and pray
    Oh God please don't take him away
    I've loved him forever
    I've hated him too
    All because he cared
    And did the things
    That good daddys
    Should do...
    Daddy
    I love you




    Submitted on 2013-12-21 12:08:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      As a tribute to your father, this was beautifully done. I'm sure that he's very proud of you. I would be.
    | Posted on 2013-12-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I wanna say first I really like the poem. Secondly I wanna say two things: You're lucky. He killed me. Sorry...
    | Posted on 2013-12-21 00:00:00 | by ForgottenGraves | [ Reply to This ]


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