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    dots Submission Name: Shattereddots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    I'm tired of people asking me.
    Why are you so sad?
    Why have you given up on love?
    Why won't you let anyone back in?
    Lemme ask you something.
    How would you feel...
    If your heart was beaten,
    If your heart was battered,
    If your heart was shattered.
    How would you feel...
    If you lost your reason to live.
    Your reason to breath.
    Your reason to believe.
    How would you feel...
    If everything you believed in was wrong.
    Your mind had tricked you,
    And you still believe that?
    I don't see anybody being happy,
    Or ever being happy again,
    After their everything is just..

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      There are moments in time when emotions extend to a deep distorted level. The poem speaks of one of these moments you may experience before coming back to normalcy. The last word - shattered - works well with a wounded heart.
    | Posted on 2014-08-22 00:00:00 | by Meera | [ Reply to This ]
      You have obviously misplaced your anything, you'll find it right on top when you open your nothing. I know its just a mere trifle like your consciousness or your imagination. These things are like gifts from God, I don't understand how you can let yourself have such a tizzy fit when your still in possession of them. Seriously dude you couldn't be that ripped up or you wouldn't be functioning anymore. I've met wounded soldiers who don't complain as much as you!

    | Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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