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a whisper of blue

Author: DaleP
ASL Info:    57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 632 /554 /330
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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a whisper of blue

                    We say goodbye as the wild earth cries
                    and I lament how the death of love
                    so becomes you

                    I cry out your name

                    Through the long night comes a new pain
                    on now
                    strange city streets
                    bequeathing false memories where dark silence                     abounds
                    drowning sound,
                    a tumult of affluent emptiness--

                    I whisper your name

                    my heart's hopes
                    burst forth
                    like a dream merchant marketing solaces,
                    on a sunny Sunday before the church doors open

                    But I am still alone
                    and the slap of you still lingers
                    more potent than any kiss
                    it's because with you
                    I understood

Submitted on 2013-12-22 21:13:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Beautifully haunting.

| Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  wow that is pretty deep , ~! like it :)
| Posted on 2013-12-23 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
  ...and that awareness
cuts deeper than the numb
blade of any winter kiss...

| Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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