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    dots Submission Name: a whisper of bluedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 555
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    dotsa whisper of bluedots
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                        We say goodbye as the wild earth cries
                        and I lament how the death of love
                        so becomes you

                        I cry out your name

                        Yet
                        Through the long night comes a new pain
                        parting
                        on now
                        strange city streets
                        bequeathing false memories where dark silence                     abounds
                        drowning sound,
                        a tumult of affluent emptiness--

                        I whisper your name

                        my heart's hopes
                        burst forth
                        like a dream merchant marketing solaces,
                        on a sunny Sunday before the church doors open

                        But I am still alone
                        and the slap of you still lingers
                        more potent than any kiss
                        it's because with you
                        I understood
                        alive




    Submitted on 2013-12-22 21:13:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Beautifully haunting.


    | Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that is pretty deep , ~! like it :)
    | Posted on 2013-12-23 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and that awareness
    cuts deeper than the numb
    blade of any winter kiss...

    | Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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