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    dots Submission Name: At least 10/24/2009dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Prose/Venting
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    dotsAt least 10/24/2009dots
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    all you do is break my heart even though were together
    not apart near or far were always at war
    trapt in a lovers quaril we cant be sivil we dont play nice
    We stare and fight fight fight painful things you love to say
    words of love never swing your way you want me to be this wife that you see
    Though as i try i see no change not a soft face not any kind words
    No i love yous or that ive noticed you try.....
    so im just going to give up but at least i know ive tried




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