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    dots Submission Name: eternal pain*old*dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 316
    Class/Type: Story/Broken
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       past since laid to ash


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    endowed with misery the one i thought that truely must have cared so much as to come to me and say his feel's but upon his face and out of his mouth he spoke those very same words to anther say's he never see's the othere never wish to be around the othere but other then the leave the mistress alone he yet again see's her and the one he thinks he hold's and love so dearly find out's that not only as his heart lay in a puddle of filth in lies does his words and the uncertainty of what he has done to the one that awaits his calls and awaits to here from him day after day and the days pass and the same thing happens over and over to this girl that loves the liar and keeps holding onto the heart that the lies would change but yet they have not only have gotten deeper cutting more deeper questions into her mind why would he do this to me what wrong have i done to deserve this? she say's to here self while at night she cries with the pillow to her face...what fool at most at that i am for believing that a past love could be something that could truely be a happie one but when it comes to mind (i'm glad it's not me he's lyeing to everyday that goes by)
    telling his mistress that he no longer cares for the beloved that he still see from time to time and calls her no and then to tell her more lies.......the person that that shallow of a man lied too lives no more.....but anew person forgetting all he ever said all his lies the fake images of her past that from time to time come to her mind but no more....so she now will cast it all aside..................




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      Why would he do this to me? What wrong have I done to deserve this? she say's to herself late at night as she cries with the pillow to her face. What a fool I am for believing that a past love could truly be a happy one. But, when it comes to mind (I'm glad it's not me he's lying to everyday that goes by).

    Interesting collection of emotions here, as if it were a dream sequence with the narrator as an interchangeable victim/ onlooker describing events as if she lived in the soul of the abused. Triangles are never linear; there's always that extra unwanted side to deal with. yep...

    I realize that this has probably been in storage for awhile, but have you considered cleaning up the spelling and grammar and developing this into a continuing story? although you strive to use poetic language and some internal rhyme here and there, it is much closer to prose than poetry.
    | Posted on 2013-12-26 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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