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Sweet Death 3/24/2010

Author: kyserin
ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 44 /25 /55
Words: 56
Class/Type: Lyrics /Gothic
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Sweet Death 3/24/2010

the cold the darkness
the frozen tears are
all that remain
a love once pure
now riped to shreds
lie's hidden truths
beneath the snow
white as my flesh
but red is the
pain and green as
the poison still in
my vain's a sip of
sweet death ill meet
you again.......

Submitted on 2013-12-23 15:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the contrasting colors here and of course
The poison has to be green:) green poison
Might kill us turn us into a monster or give us
Powers beyond mortal kin but not matter
What happens the old us dies and the future
Is unknowable but wide open.
| Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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