Sweet Death 3/24/2010

Author: kyserin ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 44 /25 /55 Words: 56

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Sweet Death 3/24/2010

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the cold the darkness the frozen tears are all that remain a love once pure now riped to shreds lie's hidden truths beneath the snow white as my flesh but red is the pain and green as the poison still in my vain's a sip of sweet death ill meet you again.......

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I like the contrasting colors here and of course The poison has to be green:) green poison Might kill us turn us into a monster or give us Powers beyond mortal kin but not matter What happens the old us dies and the future Is unknowable but wide open.

| Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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