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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Death 3/24/2010dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
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    dotsSweet Death 3/24/2010dots
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    the cold the darkness
    the frozen tears are
    all that remain
    a love once pure
    now riped to shreds
    lie's hidden truths
    beneath the snow
    white as my flesh
    but red is the
    pain and green as
    the poison still in
    my vain's a sip of
    sweet death ill meet
    you again.......




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      I like the contrasting colors here and of course
    The poison has to be green:) green poison
    Might kill us turn us into a monster or give us
    Powers beyond mortal kin but not matter
    What happens the old us dies and the future
    Is unknowable but wide open.
    | Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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