Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sweet Death 3/24/2010dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 365



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSweet Death 3/24/2010dots
    -------------------------------------------


    the cold the darkness
    the frozen tears are
    all that remain
    a love once pure
    now riped to shreds
    lie's hidden truths
    beneath the snow
    white as my flesh
    but red is the
    pain and green as
    the poison still in
    my vain's a sip of
    sweet death ill meet
    you again.......




    Submitted on 2013-12-23 15:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I like the contrasting colors here and of course
    The poison has to be green:) green poison
    Might kill us turn us into a monster or give us
    Powers beyond mortal kin but not matter
    What happens the old us dies and the future
    Is unknowable but wide open.
    | Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198500

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Shi written by ShyOne
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Yes written by poetotoe
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    AI written by poetotoe
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Formal Jen written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    You read free written by poetotoe
    Every..... written by jackz
    Records I written by Raphael
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    an unashamed poverty written by Daniel Barlow
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Carry written by saartha
    Where? written by ParanoidParadox
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    a mood to be free written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry