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    dots Submission Name: Cold words 10/17/2009 dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsCold words 10/17/2009 dots
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    no kind words only pain i feel
    like sharp glass as it cuts my arm
    that same pain i feel once more
    words are like a dagger with a Scheherazade edge piercing the flesh till there's nothing left
    my time has come i've come undone
    nothing lives but the blood in my vain's so ill say my words and be at ease at least now
    i'm at peace




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      Well, I do like this. I can relate in the feelings. Made me feel like that's close to something I would write or think. The last 4 Lines stick out to me the most, not sure why though. The lay out confused me a bit, the length of each line, I mean it seems a bit off to me. I'd say it's semi original. Overall, I really do like it. :)
    | Posted on 2013-12-29 00:00:00 | by TeslaKoyal | [ Reply to This ]


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