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    dots Submission Name: Give me dots
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    Author: Blizzard
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    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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    dotsGive me dots
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    Give me it,
    I can't take it anymore!
    I want blood
    I want to see your pain.
    I want to feel the warmth
    as it runs down my throat.
    I smell it,
    I feel it,
    I see it running through your veins.
    Give it to me or I will take it!
    I'm hungry and I can't stand it anymore,
    give me what I want!




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