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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Come walk beside me
    And take me through this world
    Show me there's more to life
    Than what I'm already shown

    I try to make more sense of it but I already know
    That the dreams towards a better life are there to behold
    but they seem a bit damned.

    Come and walk beside me and teach me a better way
    The man inside that hides the light is always reaching
    But he's falling through epitome, is he lifted?
    The gifted boy

    Erase the pain
    Release the entity
    I feel you go

    Come be beside me
    In this bitter world
    I feel your energy
    It keeps me warm

    All I have inside me
    The gift from you
    It bares my confidence
    The part of me that's true

    Embrace me
    Embrace this soul



    These words are whispered
    So that they breathe
    My soul intentions are prying out of me

    It seems so simple yet its far from settling
    I find it hard to battle the fear of mystery
    This heavy heart has weighed on me to find a design




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      To this we could relate, a plea lifting from the very soul.
    Much pleasure to read. Tfs /-))
    | Posted on 2015-12-10 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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