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    dots Submission Name: Hopeless...dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
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    The darkness engulfs my already blackened heart
    For you have created yet another stain on this already bleak existence of mine.

    I showed you compassion
    I showed you love
    I gave you friendship
    My heart was forever yours and look where I ended up..

    Alone within this hole that only seems to grow with each passing moment without you...
    Yet you lie in the arms of another woman
    However, you took my hand in marriage?

    Baby, my heart is broken beyond repair
    Denial was the first step, for I knew we had our issues yet never thought you would be so cruel
    Betrayal doesn't even come close to expressing the pain, the complete and total devastation I'm experiencing

    Now it's hating you and hating myself for ever loving you that gets me through my days.
    Hating myself for allowing myself to be vulnerable with you
    And wanting absolutely nothing more than to rewrite my past without you!!!
    For the pain and agony you have caused me is just too overwhelming...

    However, this is simply not possible
    So for now I remain, engulfed within my darkness
    Wrapped up within this deep-seeded depression...

    Submitted on 2013-12-24 04:58:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ouch. This has a lot of hurt in it, for shurr.

    Love is always a hard thing. Because it can be lost
    And lost love is one of the scariest things in the.world.

    And cheating on someone you gave your life too? ( which is what I gather happened) That's just some real crap.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-12-31 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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