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    dots Submission Name: Puzzlesdots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    My world and your world.
    They are so different.
    Everyone's world is,
    But when I look into your eyes...
    I feel our worlds connecting.
    Filling a puzzle with a our pieces.
    So close to finishing it...
    And then it happened.
    The puzzle changed.
    I longer fit.
    This piece of mine is unwelcome.
    Now he takes my place.
    He is filling the spots I can't.
    I hope he does good in my place.
    I hope his pieces make you happy.
    I hope you fit with him well.
    I won't find another.
    But don't feel bad.
    Don't feel sorry.
    For one day...
    One day my puzzle will be complete.
    And it'll all be over.
    Just make sure..
    When your life finally ends.
    You got the pieces that you want in your puzzle.

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