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    dots Submission Name: Metaphors, Rainbows, and Creationdots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMetaphors, Rainbows, and Creationdots
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    Trust in the metaphor
    That we might triumph in
    All we do
    If we can just bring ourselves
    To believe.
    Yet how misplaced faith can be
    When the object of our worship
    Scorns and demonizes us.
    We fail to meet our Father's
    Expectations
    Simply by existing.

    Yet his "unconditional love" saves us
    But only if we never kill
    Never steal
    Never worship other gods
    Never use his name in vain
    Apparently while we weren't looking
    The definition of "unconditional" was changed.

    So scurry about under His watchful eye
    And sacrifice everything to a god unsatisfied
    Do as he says, not as he does
    Don't make your promises be empty illusions.

    We exist imperfectly, and that is a sin.
    Yet our Creator, in His vanity, made us in His image
    So how can one say that he is perfection? We are Him.
    We are imperfect.
    We are a monument to our Creator's sins
    Yet still we worship.
    Why not strive for
    Something better?

    Better than floods and fire and brimstone
    Better than conditional love and lies and
    Promises as real as a rainbow.
    We don't need God to make the world better.
    He doesn't do favors, after all.
    We just need to try
    And not make it worse.




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      Religion bah humbug! Then again (of keep the faith) is it wrong to defend yourself against aggressors? To kill in the name of self? Of this is the original sin in identity crisis. Wouldn't it make it better if we trashed the whole fu#$%king lot of them. Demanded the sentience of humanitarian instinct. The impetus intrigue this intuitional intrepid does to me. Perhaps in this I'm just another ass-hole with an opinion but as the president of ass-holes unanimous I feel it's my duty to mention the truisms of this generality LOL. How I devotion wish this covered the bill, that there was such a detente' we could apply. Unfortunately of it human enigma is probably gonna have to be kicking and screaming cradle to the grave. Of we owe it to each other. In we are the theosophy theophany we evolutional development appear, we should explicate zoomorphic zoolatry with our ethology entelechy.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-12-29 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Organized religions use people for the ends of those who run them. They capitalize on the fact that people have a curiosity about why they exist. Every religion wants us to believe it has the answers in exclusion to other religions. A thinking person must reject this on the face. But, for all the mischief organized religion makes, that does not negate the fact that there is something more than us and our little thoughts about it. Whether it is something like a universal spirit we are all part of or if it is that there is just infinite chaos of which we are some random possibility, that is a something for each to find.
    | Posted on 2013-12-29 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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