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Headlights


Author: Teofila
ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 1695
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Bytes: 763



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eh...bad flow and everything but this was from the accident I had on 12/29/13


Headlights



I turn my head
Filling with dread
I know what will happen
I've seen it before
And suddenly I realize
It happens more and more

It happened so fast
No time to react
I search for
The brake lights
Last thing I saw
The headlights

crash

I was hit by a woman
Another girl in her car
Lucky for her
There will be no scar
She complained
Of her leg, head, and neck
Funny because
That's exactly how I felt

The car was towed
I was heading home
Sleepy and dizzy
Maybe disoriented
I looked up
And saw more
Another set
Of headlights...




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  Great pieces you have! I just joined yesterday, but I thought this piece was really interesting.

A cycle that recurs indefinitely. It could be representing a cycle of regret caused by someone unhindered (the one that remains scar-less), and the headlights could be a multitude of things. A spotlight, being prone to criticism and judgement. As the youngest child of my family and only male, I've definitely felt the headlights are upon me most of the time. And I am afraid if I shall crash it'll set me up for its cycle of failure.

Again, well written, and thanks for the favorite!

~Vincent
| Posted on 2014-12-30 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
  How did i miss this before. I dunno if you meant a car literally but i feel like when i learn something or notice something it tends to come at me more and more. Just like how you say it happens so fast no time to react. Like when u learn troubling news or a bad secret. And it weighs heavy in your mind. Then crash! And it hits u all at once. Anyways my dear this was great.
Great because it could have literal meaning or metaphorical.

Kase <3
| Posted on 2014-07-28 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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