Headlights

Author: Teofila ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71 Words: 113

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Headlights

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I turn my head Filling with dread I know what will happen I've seen it before And suddenly I realize It happens more and more It happened so fast No time to react I search for The brake lights Last thing I saw The headlights crash I was hit by a woman Another girl in her car Lucky for her There will be no scar She complained Of her leg, head, and neck Funny because That's exactly how I felt The car was towed I was heading home Sleepy and dizzy Maybe disoriented I looked up And saw more Another set Of headlights...

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Great pieces you have! I just joined yesterday, but I thought this piece was really interesting. A cycle that recurs indefinitely. It could be representing a cycle of regret caused by someone unhindered (the one that remains scar-less), and the headlights could be a multitude of things. A spotlight, being prone to criticism and judgement. As the youngest child of my family and only male, I've definitely felt the headlights are upon me most of the time. And I am afraid if I shall crash it'll set me up for its cycle of failure. Again, well written, and thanks for the favorite! ~Vincent

| Posted on 2014-12-30 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]

How did i miss this before. I dunno if you meant a car literally but i feel like when i learn something or notice something it tends to come at me more and more. Just like how you say it happens so fast no time to react. Like when u learn troubling news or a bad secret. And it weighs heavy in your mind. Then crash! And it hits u all at once. Anyways my dear this was great. Great because it could have literal meaning or metaphorical. Kase <3

| Posted on 2014-07-28 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]

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