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    dots Submission Name: Headlightsdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 681
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 763



    Description:
       eh...bad flow and everything but this was from the accident I had on 12/29/13


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    dotsHeadlightsdots
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    I turn my head
    Filling with dread
    I know what will happen
    I've seen it before
    And suddenly I realize
    It happens more and more

    It happened so fast
    No time to react
    I search for
    The brake lights
    Last thing I saw
    The headlights

    crash

    I was hit by a woman
    Another girl in her car
    Lucky for her
    There will be no scar
    She complained
    Of her leg, head, and neck
    Funny because
    That's exactly how I felt

    The car was towed
    I was heading home
    Sleepy and dizzy
    Maybe disoriented
    I looked up
    And saw more
    Another set
    Of headlights...




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      Great pieces you have! I just joined yesterday, but I thought this piece was really interesting.

    A cycle that recurs indefinitely. It could be representing a cycle of regret caused by someone unhindered (the one that remains scar-less), and the headlights could be a multitude of things. A spotlight, being prone to criticism and judgement. As the youngest child of my family and only male, I've definitely felt the headlights are upon me most of the time. And I am afraid if I shall crash it'll set me up for its cycle of failure.

    Again, well written, and thanks for the favorite!

    ~Vincent
    | Posted on 2014-12-30 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
      How did i miss this before. I dunno if you meant a car literally but i feel like when i learn something or notice something it tends to come at me more and more. Just like how you say it happens so fast no time to react. Like when u learn troubling news or a bad secret. And it weighs heavy in your mind. Then crash! And it hits u all at once. Anyways my dear this was great.
    Great because it could have literal meaning or metaphorical.

    Kase <3
    | Posted on 2014-07-28 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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