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    dots Submission Name: Amy's Songdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 511
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1986



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    dotsAmy's Songdots
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    On an early December morning
    I first laid eyes on you.
    After I caught a glance my way
    I figured you wanted me too.
    But her hair is like woven gold
    Skin as white as the winter snow.
    I thought you said you were leaving her
    But I guess it just wasn't so.

    First tears no one notice
    It's for goodbye.
    But your tears falling harder
    It makes me cry.
    And I know it should show me that something's wrong.
    My tears keep falling,
    doesn't matter.
    But your tears can
    cause my heart to shatter
    Your words playing lyrics to my lullaby, for Amy's song.

    And now I'm the bad one
    Because I don't want to move on.
    You refuse to leave the woman
    Who at any moment will be gone.
    You're staying behind to be a father
    To the child of an ex friend.
    And I say if she slept around before
    She could easily do it again.

    First tears no one notice
    It's for goodbye
    But your tears falling harder
    It makes me cry
    And I know it should show me that something's wrong
    My tears keep falling
    doesn't matter
    But your tears can
    cause my heart to shatter
    Your words playing lyrics to my lullaby, for Amy's song.

    A few years later I might stop thinking about you.
    After a while I might not want to cry.
    You might want to devote your life to her,
    But I can get myself to say goodbye.

    First tears no one notice
    It's for goodbye
    But your tears falling harder
    It makes me cry
    And I know it should show me that something's wrong
    My tears keep falling
    doesn't matter
    But your tears can
    cause my heart to shatter
    Your words playing lyrics to my lullaby, for Amy's song.




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