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    dots Submission Name: A Truthdots

    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Truthdots

    Jesus I come to you
    Wanting to tell the truth
    But the opposite, I do
    How can you care for me
    There is no hope for me
    Lies were all that grew
    A long life of despair
    It's not like I cared
    I did not want to stay
    Death seemed right
    Though I was here to fight
    For a price that had been paid
    Your love bought me over
    I belong to no other
    My soul You saved for sure
    Your pure loving heart
    Had taken me from the start
    There is no other cure
    My heart You make whole
    You filled the gaping hole
    Inside of my broken self
    Nothing else could ever
    Help keep me together
    With all the things that I've dealt
    You give me pure desire
    My heart has been set afire
    I give my whole heart to You
    All of the love I feel now
    Forever Yours I vow
    And that is the honest truth

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