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    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The reason why I stayed,
    It was not for me
    I wanted to save
    the one I betrayed.

    there was one in need,
    of much more than a hug,
    she needed a stone,
    to hold her down in the storm.

    The mistakes that I made,
    I tried to make it right,
    for the person that was there
    at just the right time.

    I should have waited
    Now I can see,
    That choosing to be a hero
    has become a chore for me

    I cant go anywhere,
    nor do the things that I love
    there is not a connection
    greater than friendly hug

    No inspiration
    no romance
    no songs to share
    and nothing left to dance

    im trully on a ball and chain...
    that seems to be all that remains.




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      So dark and gruesome...
    | Posted on 2015-12-07 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]


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