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Barren


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Barren



Fingering the blame
Could it be me?
Could it be a harsh twist of fate?
Arguing and fighting between
One side strong,
And one side crying
Whilst continuously struggling
To battle the journey
With a shattered dream,
& All hope frozen in defeat


But the dawn is on the horizon
And the flowers are in bloom
There’s a rainbow to this storm
Encouraging me to move,
Still –
My heart feels so empty
Like there’s someone missing
That I’ve never known at all.




Submitted on 2014-01-03 23:45:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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