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    dots Submission Name: Burieddots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 480
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    dotsBurieddots
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    This hole.
    This rut that I happen to be stuck in..
    It seems to be beginning to fill.
    Slowly but surely.
    Top to bottom.
    Side to side.
    End to end.
    And even though I still stand inside.
    They keep on piling on.
    More and more and now I can't move.
    There's just to much in my way.
    At least,
    Not on my own.
    I'm trying so hard but...
    The world is done with me.
    Finally ready to move along.
    And as it fills..
    I gasp for air.
    One final gasp as I look up.
    The sun disappearing.
    As the world buries me six feet under..




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