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    dots Submission Name: New Leafdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 635
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 4329



    Description:
       needs some edits, was just a burst write. wrote the whole thing between 2:30am-3:00am, on the toilet.


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    dotsNew Leafdots
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    Used to get high for a living
    throw down more lines,
    just to continue participating
    had everyone at a loss for anticipating
    felt alive, and it's a hell of a sensation
    not a reference to snow, I was sun baking
    prudent and pruned like a plum
    pedestal raised and patient
    raisins from the grapes of wrath
    until i'm shriveled wrinkles
    tasting of age and dry wit
    like a fine wine, I was lit
    kerosene and fire water
    burnt throats and roasted minds
    a trinity, three degrees of immolation
    abrasive and happily partaking
    in vices and back-braking
    slowed down but these words are accelerating

    taking souls and bankrupt on selling them
    out for a new fix in a petty sin
    spun whichever way makes less sense
    and sputtering, muttering curses
    quiet but this mean mugged again
    stripped and stood up for the shot
    down the hatch, bar the door locked
    cold cells and a flooded toilet
    dim lights and the tormented company
    of myself left alone with loud thoughts
    caught for a crime and dead dropped
    at the foot of a judge, a plea copped
    propped on a podium for hard knocks
    then corralled away in steel cuffs
    back to the living hell and stiff cot
    back to the shit smell and dead rot
    stuck inside my mind and it's padlocked

    Did time correcting my consciousness
    was finally free and i'll admit
    turning a new leaf like tea in this tumbler
    no more obsessing over adolescent hunger
    not stacking furniture in a room ten feet squared
    99 problems and I'm done treasure hoarding
    stuck inside counting the plunder
    bought a ton of stuff, then I up and left it
    catch the meters like metric
    trying to fit it all into the game: Tetris

    Learned easy living the hard way
    the more you build, the more bills you pay
    the more weight you burden yourself under
    the more sins you cast off
    the more heaven tears you asunder
    saving your soul from the other you
    still trying to run away with the truth
    same hue shines, guiding to brightness
    fright less, fear not through the shadow of death
    heed low calls like birds with a broken wing,
    flightless
    lighting a path through this dark night
    spent stumbling caught up on another blunder
    but stay righteous
    or your another tower toppling into another
    like domino's push brother onto brother
    momentum carries bad blood over
    lovers to leave love and sons sell out their mothers

    tougher by this line,
    still rap with the rough riders
    still tipped upside down and pillow smothered
    by smog steamed black by the dragon puff
    coughing up a lung, sober
    still haven't had enough
    got you covered on this track
    hacks take some time to recover

    For being shallow, I've sure learned a lot
    anything worth having isn't always hard fought
    better to find something worth keeping
    than counting your have nots
    best lessons truly can't be taught
    best laid plans lay too long in a poor plot
    don't plow fields still dry with dust
    fraught with drought and the hot season
    they pave the way for more waiting
    for the best rain to drop
    for a reason worthy enough
    to get lost in the moment
    enjoy the meaning
    don't watch the clock
    this second's fleeting

    Shout out to the CMA for the inspiration
    miner's pick diamonds from the underground
    true motivational speakers, like canary song
    sings this monotone life is monoxide suffocating
    cut your stones to sparkle,
    it's appreciated
    appraise for yourself and forge armor
    against the hard world's foul temptation
    rather stay sedated than commit to devil chasing

    stay humble and preach wisdom from this tablet
    run to the teaches of God's graces
    generous in enlightenment
    succumb or be forsaken




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      Uhm. Holy smokes.

    This is a rap, huh?

    I read it out loud. Sounded like a rap.

    As a poem, its hard to read out loud. Not a lot of stops.

    I really always enjoy your way with words. Such pretty, enchanting words.
    | Posted on 2014-01-05 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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