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    dots Submission Name: (Echos) of Feardots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 460
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       fear my own timely demise


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    dots(Echos) of Feardots
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    (fear ) soft whisper....

    choking , grasping for air
    I can't hold back this fear,
    That lingers here

    I'm drowning I can't breathe
    all I want ,
    is you all over me

    I'm jealous , I'm needy
    maybe I'm just to clingy

    call me a control freak
    I'll tie you to my bed

    These Pretty words dance in my head
    your fingertips on my body

    I still can't breathe
    the ecstasy is all I seem to see

    Blinded by the moonlight
    that twinkle in your eyes

    Welcomes the warmth
    I'll fly into your arms

    Drowning in an ocean
    I'm falling down ,...down...

    No strength to fight the rapids
    no will to carry on....

    ( fight for me ) a whisper calls

    ( Safe ? ) that hidden desire
    our love is this fire

    Will I get burned ? or
    shall i play with the devil

    Life is our deck of cards
    stack them up then watch us fall over

    A cup of tea our life is a dream
    I don't want to wake , me...

    I'm tired of this dormant fear
    Laying on my mind
    It's all to clear

    (echos ) I'm scared....

    I"ve seen it before
    I know this story, that happy ending?

    A fairytale love , ?
    just ends in tragedy

    I want to rewrite it start it from scratch
    figure this out ,
    write our new ending

    Wipe this fear away,
    This hell sent paranoia

    Let me be , I want to stay blind
    let that love in , lower these walls
    I only want to shine

    My gleem of hope
    whats got me swinging
    all thats left is that gut feeling

    Kick it to the crub
    I just want to let it go
    Why is it eating me ?

    (whispers) fear....

    Swallowing my soul
    making me nothing but ice cold

    I'm so sick of all this snow
    but covered the burning fire
    leaving embers glowing slow

    Deep passion , just one touch
    To me , It means to much

    Fear of losing all that I have
    but realizing it's by my own hand

    I've confessed my sadness
    My fear of losing , feeling a wedge placed
    instead of your arms embrace

    My own demise ,
    everything I touch
    just turns to dust....

    (echos ) that fear again......











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