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los ángeles caídos


Author: DaleP
ASL Info:    57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 632 /554 /330
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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los ángeles caídos


I slide
into a fade
ING
World
Of stagnant pools
Stark reflection
And haunted lives
the moon's rays
Stay a perpetual gray
I ate death with velocity
Yesterday
And now I
Fear the breath
of
Angels
Forsaken
Fell
and
Falling
For they remember the spoken
Word of God




Submitted on 2014-01-05 18:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  For me this is the poem and I particularly like this as the first line:

I ate death with velocity
Yesterday
And now I
Fear the breath
of
Angels
Forsaken
Fell
and
Falling
For they remember the spoken
Word of God

But you probably think you need all that stuff about stagnant pools and gray moon rays at the beginning for atmosphere or something.




| Posted on 2014-01-08 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
  I still can never get the video to just pop up.
| Posted on 2014-01-07 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't have any comments on the poem yet. Just the title so far. Did you mean Angels? Here's something I found for Angeles:

http://youtu.be/yJIPVhQgcz8
| Posted on 2014-01-07 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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